tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7557340011447057537.post3370542662702823688..comments2023-06-24T11:28:19.367+01:00Comments on Monkeying around: Not a morning personFlying Monkeyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12835912122094846809noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7557340011447057537.post-19371768034228216402011-01-19T13:36:45.818+00:002011-01-19T13:36:45.818+00:00Hi Dani,
Just browsing and enjoying your blog! Th...Hi Dani,<br />Just browsing and enjoying your blog! This line really gets me: "replaced by the gassy discharges of human bodies". She's definitely feeling the "burn out" of every day routine. I wonder what she does next!<br />Jeanne :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7557340011447057537.post-39287850550365871132011-01-13T20:34:58.182+00:002011-01-13T20:34:58.182+00:00Thanks for your feedback Connie. You're absolu...Thanks for your feedback Connie. You're absolutely right about putting the NOT in capitals. Just re-read it and it's confusing the way it stands. About giving HER more detail like a name I need to think about...Much appreciated comments :-)Flying Monkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12835912122094846809noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7557340011447057537.post-14414819032776028082011-01-13T18:20:41.438+00:002011-01-13T18:20:41.438+00:00Ok, you got me, I want to know what happens next! ...Ok, you got me, I want to know what happens next! My favorite bits were, "As if along with the oxygen all life had been sucked out of it and replaced by the gassy discharges of human bodies, reeking of dissatisfaction." and "It was one of those psycho crap books she naturally loathed,". The first because it's a brilliant piece of description and the second because I can totally identify.<br /> Contructive critizism, this is difficult. Minor things only, you referred to her as "her and she" but I would like a name and maybe a bit of physical description or maybe that comes later? The title of the book, I had to read twice to be sure I got it. Maybe the word "NOT" could have been italicized or capitalized for emphasis? Assuming here that the rest of your readers are as dense as I am. <br /> Wonderful start!Connie Wolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11287196160811509033noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7557340011447057537.post-50465699659499542272011-01-11T22:29:17.751+00:002011-01-11T22:29:17.751+00:00Thanks David. Personally I am also not a morning p...Thanks David. Personally I am also not a morning person ;-)Flying Monkeyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12835912122094846809noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7557340011447057537.post-64721132661806056862011-01-11T16:50:10.629+00:002011-01-11T16:50:10.629+00:00mornings and I arent good friends:( good write my...mornings and I arent good friends:( good write my friendAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com