Thursday, 9 December 2010

Forgiveness (inspired by Poets United)

Bathing in a pool
Of guilt and regret
The last words of a fool
Melodiously said
Could have
Would have
Should have
Could have learned
To accept
Would have
Given respect
To the fact
That we all make mistakes
And the past has long gone
Should have tried not to be
The fool in that song

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14 comments:

  1. Bubba9 December 2010 at 17:31

    Nice take on forgiveness, Dani.

    "Fool" is often used in songs, like "What A Fool Believes" or "Fool In The Rain" or "Why Do Fools Fall In Love?"

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  2. Flying Monkey9 December 2010 at 17:37

    Cheers Eric. That's probably because we all are fools quite a lot of the time and because it's nicer that saying "idiot" ;-)

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  3. Eileen T O'Neill .....9 December 2010 at 18:21

    Flying Monkey,
    Very nice words which could apply to so many circumstances.
    It's simply the choice we make at a particular time. In the mood for forgiveness....or not.

    Eileen
    Nice to have met you via Poets United.
    I have added your Blog!

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  4. Kodjo Deynoo9 December 2010 at 21:46

    Should have tried not to be the fool in the song..great line, nice poem

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  5. Anonymous10 December 2010 at 00:49

    I think we all have been that fool in the song at one time, nice write

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  6. Mary10 December 2010 at 01:30

    Your poem is filled with meaning. Could have, should have, would have... I agree with 'words4afridnd' that we all have probably been that fool at one time or another! Hopefuly we learn!

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  7. flaubert10 December 2010 at 01:31

    Nice flow to this Dani.
    Pamela

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  8. Sherry Blue Sky10 December 2010 at 03:08

    Well written poem. I especially like the last two lines! Well done.

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  9. Rashmi10 December 2010 at 05:44

    Nice take on the prompt..
    I like these lines
    "The last words of a fool
    Melodiously said
    Could have
    Would have
    Should have "

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  10. Flying Monkey10 December 2010 at 08:57

    Thank you all for stopping by and commenting. Here's the link to the song:
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IaYrMR5vBnc
    I've changed the words around a bit.

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  11. ninotaziz10 December 2010 at 10:33

    Dear Dani,
    Wow! I love the blue expanse that is your backdrop to your blog.

    Your poem drips regret - poor fool in the song. I see him sometimes when I look in the mirror!

    Hugs

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  12. Flying Monkey10 December 2010 at 14:44

    Thanks. So do I Nino ;-)
    I'm trying hard to stop being that fool :-)

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  13. Linda Bob Grifins Korbetis Hall10 December 2010 at 17:03

    you have such beautiful wonders.
    you will be forgiven with your unbeatable humor.

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  14. Evelyn10 December 2010 at 22:36

    "Given respect
    To the fact
    That we all make mistakes
    And the past has long gone"
    I wish I could make this my truth.

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